The purpose of this assignment was to get our minds flowing creatively, but yet constructively as we thought about analogies that could connect our feelings about writings to actual real world ideas.
For my analogy essay I chose to write about how I felt constricted using the five-paragraph essay and how I didn’t know that I was constricted by the five-paragraph essay until I read Hjortshoj’s essay, “Footstools and Furniture” at the beginning of the semester.
I compared this feeling of constriction to horse back riding. I used to ride a lot when I was younger and I got to a fairly advanced level. I hadn’t realized how much I took advantage of this advanced level though, until I broke my arm, and was forced to be put back on a lead rope and kind of unnecessarily re-learn how to ride again. It was a major set back, and just like the lead rope constricted me from riding to my full potential, the five-paragraph essay format restricts me from truly exploring all discoveries I can make while writing.
It was more fun for me to write this essay than others, since it was fairly creative, although at first I did have a hard time when we were asked to add another page to our essays. I thought, “What? How? It’s already a pretty good essay, why should I add more?”
I then discovered how important the addition of small details can be, in order to really enhance one’s diction and make a paper full of more imagery and description, which not only makes it more interesting to read, but also a paper that is more detailed is just more engaging and complete.
A big change from my rough draft to my final draft is that I added more of a conclusion in my final draft. My last sentence is, “I may make mistakes, but I am hoping to be free again, and to grow from my mistakes, instead of quickly searching for the safety of the lead rope,” which I think not only concludes my essay, but brings me back to a connection to the real world, and how I can improve myself. I am proud of this first essay, and the additions of detail that I was able to add in order to make my paper not only longer, but more interesting.