Analysis Essay Pre-Rough Draft

This essay took a lot of planning, and my final draft is not similar at all to my first very rough idea of what my paper would be like, besides the fact that in both drafts I analyze Hjortshoj’s diction.

Here is a picture of my initial outline for my draft. I apologize for how blurry the picture is.

If you zoom in, you can see that I highlighted words such as "we" and "you". I initially wanted to analyze how these words would have an impact on the reader. I eventually came to realize though that I could take my argument so much further than this.
If you zoom in, you can see that I highlighted words such as “we” and “you”. I initially wanted to analyze how these words would have an impact on the reader. I eventually came to realize though that I could take my argument so much further than this.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Below I am including my initial typed outline from when I was brainstorming what the entirety of my paper might look like.

In his informative essay, “Footstools and Furniture”, Keith Hjortshoj informs college students around the United States about problems one may encounter with the forms of writing they learned in high school. Throughout middle school and high school, many students are taught that their papers are to be written by using a system of five paragraphs, three of which that follow the thesis statement, and basically the same paragraph for the introduction and conclusion.

Throughout his essay, Hjortshoj employs personable diction in order to engage the reader and make his lessons extremely relatable.

To further enhance his diction, Hjortshoj’s use of descriptive imagery places the reader inside of his text, really connecting the reader to everything that he is arguing.

On the other hand though, Hjortshoj seemed to lack an establishment of credibility in his essay. While reading his essay, although his diction and imagery makes his point very clear for a student to understand, students might find themselves asking, “Well, who is Hjortshoj? Why should we believe what he is saying?”

Out of all of the required reading material for Writing 100, this essay is to be the most easily accepted by students due to all of Hjortshoj’s relevant examples and easy language.

(Restate thesis). There is a time in many students’ lives when they find that rather than becoming more interested in college readings and writings, due to the complexity and repetitiveness of assignments they begin to become disinterested. Hjortshoj perfectly captures his audience’s attention though in his essay, “Footstools and Furniture”, while making a valid point at the same time.

 

Looking back on this I feel as if this level of writing if very elementary compared to my final draft. I think that I was trying to analyze too many things between analyzing the diction and imagery. At this point in time I was not even prepared to include the implication of Hjortshoj’s diction and imagery in my paper.

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This is a place for me to keep all of my work from my Writing 100 class that I took with Professor Jennifer Metsker.

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